But Alex’s professor doesn’t like it. She underlines the very first two sentences, and she writes, “This is simply too general. Arrive at the true point.” She underlines the 3rd and fourth sentences, and she writes, “You’re just restating the question I inquired. What’s your point?” She underlines the final sentence, after which writes when you look at the margin, “What’s your thesis?” because the last sentence into the paragraph only lists topics. It does not make an argument.
Is Alex’s professor just a grouch? Well, no—she is trying to show this student that college writing isn’t about following a formula (the model that is five-paragraph, it is about making a quarrel. Her first sentence is general, the way in which she learned a five-paragraph essay should start. But through the professor’s perspective, it’s far too general—so general, in fact, she didn’t ask students to define civil war that it’s completely outside of the assignment. (więcej…)